Domande riguardo a frasi esempio con, spiegazione d'utilizzo di "Hillery"s

A: × Hillery Green is a detective inspector in Oxfordshire.
✓ Hillary Green is a detective inspector in Oxfordshire.

× She is living in a narrow boat moored at a canal; the house she shared with her deceased husband is in the process of selling in the market.
✓ She is living in a narrow boat moored at a canal; the house she shared with her late husband is for sale.

× Also, before he died her corrupt husband had been doing the dirty business of trading animal parts.
✓ Before he died, her corrupt husband had been dealing in the shady business of trading animal parts.

× Hillary herself, though she had known nothing about his side business, had been investigated until recently.
✓ As for Hillary, though knowing nothing about his side business, she herself had been investigated until recently.

× However, Hillary accidentally knew a huge amount of illegal money her husband hoarded up is stashed in a bank in Acapulco, and has ever been dithering over what to do about it.
✓ However, Hillary had accidentally discovered that a huge amount of illegal money her husband hoarded up is stashed in a bank in Acapulco, and has been dithering over what to do about it.

× This time, DI Hillary comes to lead the investigation into a murder case occurred in a Oxfordshire village.
✓ This time, DI Hillary is assigned to lead the investigation into a murder case that took place in a village in Oxfordshire.

× A man who's going to be nominated for Tory politician was found murdered in the kitchen of his mansion.
✓ A man who was going to be nominated as a Tory politician was found murdered in the kitchen of his mansion.

× His wife, his campaign secretary, and a few who have obvious grudge against the victim, all parties concerned, have alibis.
✓ His wife, his campaign secretary, and a few who have obvious grudges against the victim - all being concerned parties - have alibis.

× In the meantime, Hillary gets shot participating in the raid into the venue of a illegal drug trading.
✓ In the meantime, Hillary gets shot participating in a raid on an illegal drug trading den.