Domande riguardo a frasi esempio con, spiegazione d'utilizzo di "Kinmen"s

A: × Kinmen, where we live, is an island which is surrounded by sea, has a special geographical location, and lacks water.
✓ Kinmen, where I* live, is an island surrounded by sea, has a special geographical location, and lacks water.

× Here, rainfall and air temperature will change by season.
✓ Here, rainfall and air temperature changes by season but (connect to next sentence)

× Overall, the precipitation here is basically low throughout every year.
✓ (connect to previous sentence) overall, the precipitation here is low throughout the year.

× Because of the dramatic climate change, Kinmen also attracts some certain kinds of birds to come to reproduce or to get through winter.
✓ **As a result of dramatic changes in the environment due to climate change, Kinmen attracts certain kinds of birds to come to reproduce or to get through the winter.

× Our school, KMSH (Kinmen Senior High School) is located west of Kinmen Island, longitude and latitude is about (120°,24°).
✓ Our school, KMSH (Kinmen Senior High School) is located west of Kinmen Island with a longitude and latitude of about (120°, 24°).

× Compared to Taiwan, the cold & hot days here are easier to distinguish.
✓ Compared to Taiwan, the cold and hot days here are easier to distinguish with (connect to next)

× Summer is hotter and wetter while winter is colder and drier here.
✓ (connect to previous) hotter and wetter summers and colder and drier winters.

*if this is NOT a group work, use “I”
**for a report, I think this is a little abrupt, it doesn’t flow nicely from the previous sentence (try to make a sentence that links the two ideas together)