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Kacki
5 dic 2016

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could you correct my sentences written in below?

I would like to apply for the advertised position of sports trainer at your team.
I majored in physical therapy at university, and I have a qualification as an athlete trainer. I promise that my qualification will allow me to contribute to keep player's condition.

p.s. this is my school homework. I have to write a job application letter, and I must use those words; major in, contribute to and allow me to__. plus I have to write it about 40 words.
Thanks!

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polynomialize
5 dic 2016

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I would like to apply for the advertised position of a sports trainer in your team.
I majored in physical therapy at university and I have a qualification as an athletic trainer. My qualifications and experience will allow me to contribute positively to the well-being of the athletes on your team.

It sounds more natural now, but a task which forces learners to include words makes it hard for it to sound 100% natural.

Kacki
5 dic 2016

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@polynomialize: Thanks sooo much for correcting. I really appreciate you!!
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terrywallwork
5 dic 2016

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@Katsukillllll I would write:

I would like to apply for the advertised position of a sports trainer on your team.

I majored in physical therapy at university. I am qualified as an (athletic/athlete) trainer. I think that my qualification will allow me to positively contribute to your player's athletic conditioning.

Thankyou.

📚💜🇯🇵✅👍😁

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Kacki
5 dic 2016

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@terrywallwork: Thank you soooo much!! ありがとう
polynomialize
5 dic 2016

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@terrywallwork I like your version. Only thing though - instead of "advertised position of sports trainer", it should be "advertised position of a sports trainer."

You forgot the 'a'.

terrywallwork
5 dic 2016

  • Inglese (Regno Unito)
  • Inglese (Stati Uniti)

@polynomialize Corrected 😁

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agilvey37
5 dic 2016

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@terrywallwork change sports trainer to athletic trainer. A sports trainer does not exist.

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