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In today's world, water pollution is getting more and more serious.
In this paragraph, water pollution will be defined and reduction measures will be discussed.

Water pollution refers to the release of substances into bodies of water unsafe for human use and disrupts aquatic ecosystems.

Water pollution adversely affects the health and life of man, animals and plants alike.

As a chart above shows, 10% of pollutants entering the oceans come from industrial wastewater.
Chemicals and heavy metals from industrial wastewater contaminate waterways.
These pollutants are toxic to aquatic organisms and most of them reduce the lifespan and reproductive ability of organisms.

If we had struggled much to reduce water pollution, the problems would have not been too serious.

Therefore we need to struggle at both individual level and societal level to reduce water pollution.

Individually, we should not dispose of household chemicals or cleaning agents down the sink or toilet.

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Please help me. 🙏

In today's world, water pollution is getting more and more serious.
In this paragraph, water pollution will be defined and reduction measures will be discussed.

Water pollution refers to the release of substances into bodies of water unsafe for human use and disrupts aquatic ecosystems.

Water pollution adversely affects the health and life of man, animals and plants alike.

As a chart above shows, 10% of pollutants entering the oceans come from industrial wastewater.
Chemicals and heavy metals from industrial wastewater contaminate waterways.
These pollutants are toxic to aquatic organisms and most of them reduce the lifespan and reproductive ability of organisms.

If we had struggled much to reduce water pollution, the problems would have not been too serious.

Therefore we need to struggle at both individual level and societal level to reduce water pollution.

Individually, we should not dispose of household chemicals or cleaning agents down the sink or toilet.

podorii09 · Accepted Answer

As a chart above shows —> as  the chart above shows

If we had struggled much to reduce water pollution, the problems would have not been too serious —> If we were vigilant (or proactive) in reducing water pollution, the problems would have not become so serious.

Therefore we need to struggle at both individual level and societal level to reduce water pollution. —> Therefore, we need to be vigilant (or proactive) at both the individual level and the societal level to reduce water pollution.

borcpp · Answer

@Korean_EngLearner

In today's world, water pollution is getting more and more serious.
In this paragraph, water pollution will be defined and reduction measures will be discussed.

Water pollution refers to the release of substances into bodies of water making it unsafe for human use and disrupting aquatic ecosystems.

Water pollution adversely affects the health and life of humans, animals, and plants alike.

As the chart above shows, 10% of pollutants entering the oceans come from industrial wastewater.
Chemicals and heavy metals from industrial wastewater contaminate waterways.
These pollutants are toxic to aquatic organisms and most of them reduce the lifespan and reproductive ability of organisms.

If we had worked more to reduce water pollution, the problems would not have been so serious.

Therefore, we need to work at both individual level and societal level to reduce water pollution.

Individually, we should not dispose of household chemicals or cleaning agents down the sink or toilet.