Could anyone kindly check my composition?

Another reason surveillance cameras are harmful is it causes so-called camera-shyness. The term "camera-shyness", also known as "Scopophobia". refers to a person who feels excessive stress or fear when being recorded. The situations where people are being captured in images were quite limited before technology emerged. However, today, with a mass of surveillance cameras everywhere in the world, the anxiety people with this illness may have is unmeasurable. Hence, surveillance cameras have bad influences on certain individuals in society, "

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Jean_G

25 nov 2022

Inglese (Stati Uniti)
Inglese (Regno Unito)

Another reason surveillance cameras are harmful is that they cause so-called "camera shyness." The term "camera shyness," also known as "Scopophobia," refers to a person who feels excessive stress or fear when being recorded. Prior to the advent of technology, the situations in which people were captured in images were quite limited. However, today, with a mass of surveillance cameras everywhere in the world, the anxiety people with this illness may have is unmeasurable. Hence, surveillance cameras have bad influences on certain individuals in society.

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tkham1212

25 nov 2022

Giapponese

@Jean_G Thank you for correcting the whole essay. though I'm a uni student and have some opportunities to have my teacher check my writing, I always come here to get some additional ideas to consider, and it's always interesting to see how natives write what I wanted to express in their own very natural way.( It's slight weird that my own opinions become more natural and easier to get across when it's rewritten by other people lol)
Anyway, thank you so much 💓