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28 apr 2016
- Giapponese
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Inglese (Stati Uniti)
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Inglese (Regno Unito)
Domanda chiusa
Domande Inglese (Stati Uniti)
Please correct my entry to make it sound more natural, if you don't mind. I prefer Native speakers. If you know a better way to write it, please tell me.
I have my opinion that comes with my personality with straightforward and passion inside but we are hierarchy society in my country so people don't like someone who sounds stubborn never admit the falt and come of brush, I don't like it either. Well, I wonder how to represent the word, cheeky or sausy? but that's necessity to tell how you feel about it. I think that's a good thing. You know we're laborers so we at least have a right to claim it to break the stutas quo.
Please correct my entry to make it sound more natural, if you don't mind. I prefer Native speakers. If you know a better way to write it, please tell me.
I have my opinion that comes with my personality with straightforward and passion inside but we are hierarchy society in my country so people don't like someone who sounds stubborn never admit the falt and come of brush, I don't like it either. Well, I wonder how to represent the word, cheeky or sausy? but that's necessity to tell how you feel about it. I think that's a good thing. You know we're laborers so we at least have a right to claim it to break the stutas quo.
I have my opinion that comes with my personality with straightforward and passion inside but we are hierarchy society in my country so people don't like someone who sounds stubborn never admit the falt and come of brush, I don't like it either. Well, I wonder how to represent the word, cheeky or sausy? but that's necessity to tell how you feel about it. I think that's a good thing. You know we're laborers so we at least have a right to claim it to break the stutas quo.
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28 apr 2016
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- Inglese (Stati Uniti)
As we say in America, 'Practice makes perfect.' 😉
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- Inglese (Stati Uniti)
Let's break this down. "I have my opinion that comes with my personality with straightforward and passion inside but we are hierarchy society in my country so people don't like someone who sounds stubborn never admit the falt and come of brush, I don't like it either. "
I know you are trying to sound more natural by saying a lot in this sentence, however this is a little too much. 😝 this is what is called a 'run-on sentence'. Run-on sentences are sentences that have way too much information in one sentence. I would change this to, 'It is my opinion and personality that is straightforward and passionate. However In my home country, we are of a hierarchy society. We don't like those who are stubborn, never admit their faults, and are rash. I don't like these kinds of people either.'
I would change 'to represent' to 'what word would properly represent'.
'Well, I wonder what word would properly represent it, cheeky or sassy?'
Just missing a personal pronoun. 😄
'but I think that it is necessity to tell how you feel about it.'
I would just remove, 'I think that's a good thing.' It's pretty clear that is the case. XD
'You know we're laborers so we at least have the right to claim the status quo. ' Just removed a few words.
I hope this helps!
- Giapponese
@buukikurisutaru: Thank you very much! Your writing is super perfect! I'm impressed.
Thank you for your time, and all explatnation. I'll rewrite one more time to sound good.
Thank you for your time, and all explatnation. I'll rewrite one more time to sound good.
- Inglese (Stati Uniti)
As we say in America, 'Practice makes perfect.' 😉
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