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I've just a programme which called "The dangerous moments". The programme shows on every Saturday and Sunday afternoon but I don't normally watch it. An episode today is a thug who used a fake gun to rob a jewellery shop. The story happened in the early afternoon when most of the staff of the shop were taking a break or eating outside. While the thug was threatening, there's just 2 young girl staff. Two girls were threatened so surprisingly and they had become too far scared because of his gun. It really took about 10 minutes to let the thug gets so many precious goods. But before leaving, the thug did a noob thing, he took off his face mask and gave two girls a creepy smile. Certainly, every jewellery shop has a camera in case some bad situations would happen. The thug actually is caught a day afterwards. I think If he didn't show his face, he could've hidden longer and then he has been able to spend some things what he had robbed

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I've just a programme which called "The dangerous moments". The programme shows on every Saturday and Sunday afternoon but I don't normally watch it. An episode today is a thug who used a fake gun to rob a jewellery shop. The story happened in the early afternoon when most of the staff of the shop were taking a break or eating outside. While the thug was threatening, there's just 2 young girl staff. Two girls were threatened so surprisingly and they had become too far scared because of his gun. It really took about 10 minutes to let the thug gets so many precious goods. But before leaving, the thug did a noob thing, he took off his face mask and gave two girls a creepy smile. Certainly, every jewellery shop has a camera in case some bad situations would happen. The thug actually is caught a day afterwards. I think If he didn't show his face, he could've hidden longer and then he has been able to spend some things what he had robbed

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I watch a programme called "The dangerous moments". The programme airs every Saturday and Sunday afternoon, but usually I don't watch it. Today's episode is about a thug, who used a fake gun to rob a jewellery shop. The story happened in the early afternoon, when most of the staff from the shop were taking a break or eating outside. There were only two young employees in the shop while it was being threatened. The two girls, who were being threatened, were scared because of the gun and after ten minutes the thug had already taken so much precious jewellery. But before leaving, the thug took off his mask and gave the girls a creepy smile, which was an amateur act. Every jewellery shop has a camera in case a thief steals anything and because of this, the police were able to catch the thug within the next day. I think that if he didn't show his face, he could've hidden for a lot longer and could've sold the jewellery he stole.