4th August, 2017

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is ////.
I study engineering science at University of ~~~~ in Japan. I have a working holyday visa and I’ll arrive at New Zealand 12nd September. I am looking for a job in Auckland and I’m interested in cleaner or reception position. With my experience in Japan and other countries, I believe I would be a good addition to the staff of ~~~~.

I am hardworking and pay attention to the wishes and feelings of others. When I was in Japan, I worked as a waitress in a Japanese-style hotel. I prepared rooms, provided some amenities, serve meals, and cleaning up after guests checked out. Based this experience, I would be well organized for the customer. If I can work at ~~~~, I will help the guests to stay comfortable.

Secondly, I feel happy to meet many people and welcome to the guest. While I travel abroad, I stayed with backpackers in every country. With this experience, I am a kind server and can handle complaints from English customers. If I get the chance to work at your guesthouse, you will be satisfied with me. I will do my best.

I am willing to discuss my qualifications with you in person. Thank you for reading my letter and I hope to hear from you in the future.

Yours Sincerely,
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Your writing is very good. There are just a few corrections to make. I put them in parentheses like this-(example). If you needed to add something I put it in these brackets {example}. I put an -(X) if you should remove that word completely. I hope you understand!

4th August, 2017

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is ////.
I study engineering science at University of ~~~~ in Japan. I have a working holyday-(holiday) visa and I’ll-(I will) arrive at New Zealand {on the} 12nd September. I am looking for a job in Auckland {,} and I’m interested in {a} cleaner or reception position. With my experience in Japan and other countries, I believe I would be a good addition to the staff of ~~~~.

I am hardworking-(hard working) and pay attention to the wishes and feelings of others. When I was in Japan, I worked as a waitress in a Japanese-style hotel. I prepared rooms, provided some amenities, serve-(served) meals, and cleaning-(cleaned) up after guests checked out. Based {on} this experience, I would be well organized-( for the customer. If I can work at ~~~~, I will help the guests to {always} stay comfortable.

Secondly, I feel happy to meet many people and welcome to-the-(X) guest-(guests). While I travel-(traveled) abroad, I stayed with backpackers in every country. With this experience, I am a kind server and can handle complaints from English customers. If I get the chance to work at your guesthouse, you will be satisfied with me. I will do my best.

I am willing to discuss my qualifications with you in person. Thank you for reading my letter and I hope to hear from you in the future.

Yours Sincerely,
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