Can you check my sentences?TOEFL

agree or disagree

Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any realationship.

Some people agree with that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship and others disagree. In my opinion. I totally agree with the idea that it is the most signifcant thing in any realationship to always tell the truth. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, when people are told the sad truth, they feel very sad. Yet, these experience can make them grow and be a strong person. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was high school student, I have one best friend, Tom, who likes the girl, Amy, and she also likes him. He often asked her for a date and they often go to many places. And they were in good relationship, but, one day Amy told me that she needed to move to abroad due to her father's job and not to to say Tom. That is because she thought that she cannot meet him any more and if she tell him the truth, she cannot put up with the truth. However, before she left Japan, I thought that I needed to tell him about the truth and I told him the story. After he knows that, he soon went to ask her and swore to marry her. Finally, after Tom and Amy graduatetd from the university they married. If I did not say the truth, they could not marry.

Secondly, telling the truth make strong relationship. When I was a child I would often play basketball with my friend, Hiro. And one day, I played baketball with his ball and I did mistake and lost his basketball and I thought he did not know that I lost his ball. In addition, for a week after losing his ball, I could not tell the truth. I knew that if I did not say, the relationship between me and him did not become worse. But, I realized that I needed to tell him about the truth and I talked with him. Actually he knew what happened and waited for my apologize. After a while, he treated me kindly. And I found that telling the truth is important things. If I did not tell the truth, he could not trust me after the matter. For these reasons, it is worthwhile to tell the truth.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is crucial for any realationship to tell the truth. This is because, telling the truth can bring happiness and strength friendship.

Question

Can you check my sentences?TOEFL

agree or disagree

Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any realationship.

Some people agree with that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship and others disagree. In my opinion. I totally agree with the idea that it is the most signifcant  thing in any realationship to always tell the truth. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.


     First of all, when people are told the sad truth, they feel very sad. Yet, these experience can make them grow and be a strong person. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was high school student, I have one best friend, Tom, who likes the girl, Amy, and she also likes him. He often asked her for a date and they often go to many places.  And they were in good relationship, but, one day Amy told me that she needed to move to abroad due to her father's job and not to to say Tom. That is because she thought that she cannot meet him any more and if she tell him the truth, she cannot put up with the truth. However, before she left Japan, I thought that I needed to tell him about the truth and I told him the story. After he knows that, he soon went to ask her and swore to marry her. Finally, after Tom and Amy graduatetd from the university they married. If I did not say the truth, they could not marry.



     Secondly, telling the truth make strong relationship. When I was a child I would often play basketball with my friend, Hiro. And one day, I played baketball with his ball and I did mistake and lost his basketball and I thought he did not know that I lost his ball. In addition, for a week after losing his ball, I could not tell the truth. I knew that if I did not say, the relationship between me and him did not become worse. But, I realized that I needed to tell him about the truth and I talked with him. Actually he knew what happened and waited for my apologize. After a while, he treated me kindly. And I found that telling the truth is important things. If I did not tell the truth, he could not trust me after the matter. For these reasons, it is worthwhile to tell the truth.



In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is crucial for any realationship to tell the truth. This is because, telling the truth can bring happiness and strength friendship.

kisspeach · Answer

Good luck to you!! I will make some suggested corrections. You wrote well, and this is a very insightful essay.

Paragraph 1:
"some people [agree that] always telling..."

Paragraph 2:
*Something to remember:
When your context is in the past, your verbs should be in the past tense.*

"When I was [a] high school student, I [had] one best friend [named] Tom who [liked] a girl named Amy, and she also [liked] him"

"...they often [went] to many places. They were in a good relationship..."

"...and not to [tell] Tom."

"...she thought that she [could not] meet him [anymore, and that if she told] him the truth, she [would not be able to] put up with the truth"
(you can also say "handle the truth/situation")

"I thought that I needed to [tell him the truth]"

"Soon after he [knew], he went to [propose], and swore to marry her"

"If I did not [speak] the truth, they could not [have married]"

Paragraph 3)
"...telling the truth [makes] strong [relationships]"

"...I [made a mistake]"

"I knew that if I did not [tell him/confess/admit it], the relationship between [he and I would] not become worse"

"...waited for my [apology]"

"...telling the truth is [an important thing]"

"...he [would not have trusted] me after the matter"

Conclusion)
"...bring happiness and strength [to friendships]"

I didn't make very heavy corrections because I wanted to keep your writing style and voice consistent in the essay.

kisspeach · Answer

@wannaget80 I'm happy to help!

XP1 · Answer

"Whether some people agree or disagree that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship, in my opinion, I totally agree with the idea that it is the most significant thing in any relationship to always tell the truth. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, when people are told the sad truth, they feel very sad. Yet, these experiences can make them grow and be a strong person. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a high school student, I had one best friend, Tom, who liked the girl Amy, who also likes him. He often asked her for a date, and they often go to many places. They were in good relationship, but one day, Amy told me that she needed to move abroad due to her father's job and told me not to tell Tom. She thought that because she could not meet him anymore, if she told him the truth, he could not handle the truth. However, before she left Japan, I thought that I needed to tell him the truth, so I told him the story. After he found out, he soon went to ask her and swore to marry her. Finally, after Tom and Amy graduated from university, they married. If I did not say the truth, they would not have married.

Secondly, telling the truth makes a strong relationship. When I was a child, I would often play basketball with my friend Hiro. One day, while I was playing basketball with his ball, I made a mistake and lost his basketball. I thought that he did not know that I lost his ball. For a week after losing his ball, I could not tell the truth. I knew that if I did not say anything, the relationship between me and him would become worse. However, after I realized that I needed to tell him the truth, I talked with him. Actually, he knew what happened and waited for me to apologize. After a while, he treated me kindly. As a result, I found out that telling the truth is an important thing. If I had not told the truth, he would not trust me after what happened. For these reasons, it is worthwhile to tell the truth.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is crucial for any relationship to tell the truth. This is because, telling the truth can bring happiness and strengthened friendship."